Introduce about me
[Introduce about me]
Hello. everyone? My name is Chea Rin-Jun. I'm here today to
talk about introduction about me. Do you know about me a lot?
Anyway, let's start it from now! I'm from Seoul and I'm lived in
Mokdong. My school is kyongin elementary school and I'm in
the 6th grade class 6. I have 4 groups of my family member.
Mom, Dad my older sister, and me. Mt mom and Dad is privacy
and my sister is middle school 3rd grade. My characterisitc is
really active but when I don't have any friendly friend, I didn't
do anything even though chances will comes up to me. My
hobby is chatting with my friends by using my cell phones. But
it's hard now because my mom take it because I do it so much
that makes my mom angry. I don't like the foods which is really
spicy, really sweet or really sour. This is the end of my writing.
Thank you for sharing your time listening to my writing.
FIX:
답글삭제Turn OFF Caps Lock and write in lower case letters please.
line 1: Hello, -> Hello. (punctuation)
line 1: Seould -> Seoul (spelling)
line 2: 6 -> 6th
line 2: I use -> I am using Google for the
line 2: have -> had (verb tense)
line 3: take out But
line 5: by -> in
line 5: but -> ,but (comma before but)
line 5,6 : but sometimes ... first time -> but sometimes, because of this, it is difficult for me to adopt to a new place.
line 6: erase now
line 7: says -> said (verb tense)
line 7: have -> had (verb tense)
line 7: problems -> problem
line 7: text messages. (punctuation)
line 8: erase so
line 8: capitalize N in nowadays
line 8: insert for between hard and me
line 8: messeaging ->messaging (spelling mistake)
line 8: The ting ... spicy. -> I hate things that are so sweet, so bitter, or so spicy.
line 9: you -> your
line 10: listeneing to -> looking at
You have pretty much a steady writing ability. I would like it if you looked for more spelling and punctuation mistakes before posting your assignment.
I hope you can adapt quickly to KMLA without your phone and make other better friends here! :)